phrasing improvements

Co-authored-by: Ted Thibodeau Jr <tthibodeau@openlinksw.com>

index.bs

@@ -2703,10 +2703,10 @@ Determining the W3C Decision</h4>
 
 	<div class="example">
 		For example, to make [=substantive changes=] to a [=technical report=]
-		prior to publication as a [=Recommendation=]
-		it would need to go through a new [=Update Request=]
-		and be republished as a new [=Candidate Recommendation=],
-		and to fulfill the criteria for advancement.
+		prior to publication as a [=Recommendation=],
+		it would need to go through a new [=Update Request=],
+		be republished as a new [=Candidate Recommendation=],
+		and fulfill the criteria for advancement.
 		Alternatively, the desired changes can be introduced as non-substantive amendments
 		using the process for [[#revising-rec|revising a Recommendation]].
 		However, they cannot be directly integrated between [=PR=] and [=REC=],